My Peer Review Comments

Here are some comments for my group mates:

For Rahni:

There are some grammar problems like run-on sentences or punctuation misplacements.Also, I got a little confused with the wording of this sentence "Marilee goes on a few more dates with Quinn but she doesn't count them as dates and that hurts him because he later finds out that her and randy went on a date when Randy got rejected by Carly and Marilee counted that as a date". Furthermore, adding some sentence variety would be great. Overall, the lesson was very straightforward and it is clear that you learned from it. Your background information helped really well.


For Eric:
Perhaps you can add your opinion of the topic of abortion and join this debate the author is promoting to readers. I like your concise way of writing- it is easier to understand and not clutered with unnecessary words. Also, you should give us more information on the content of the book. After I read about the topic, I wanted to know more about how the story developed and resolved. It would be interesting if you incorporate what you think the author's opinion is towards abortion and expand on that with evidences from the book.

For Vincent:
Your book review expanded greatly on your view of the importance of friendship, which I think is very nice because it adds voice to the piece and I can distinguish it from the others. Perhaps you can analyze the character Reynie Muldoon more. You started off describing him very well and you should explain to the readers the incredible things that you mentioned he did.